Briana

Heres my first paragraph =] im still working on it.....

 Several factors influenced the extension of Prussian power over German states during the period 1815-1848, however key economical, political and social elements played significant roles in the country’s development, ultimately leading to Prussian dominance within the European political scene.  Uh, this isn't much to work with... Kudos with:   If you continue to add these factors, This essay will be very well writen
 *  restating the question
 *  stating the key reasons
 *  'cause &effect' language

But.. You could elaborate much more &answer the question. Make sure you add "Language of Opinion" Again, this is only a small amount of work to critise. If you continue to go the way that your going &add in the few things, I think your essay will turn out very good. I can't wait to read it! :D

Heres another paragraph i wrote about the failure of liberalism. again im not finsihed. The concepts of nationalism and liberalism became widespread throughout the Prussian population, Burschenschaften was a left-wing group of university students who fiercely promoted the introduction of ‘the soverignity of the people’, as well as the projection of their needs and desires over the monarchs. The monarch, Frederick William, threatened by this dangerous wave of radical thinking, sought to crush any notion of freedom and independence lest it undermine his autocratic government.

Ok, this is a progress. Of course we need to elaborate much more but other than that this a good start to the essay. Your language use is extremely well done &you really listened to my critisim about adding "Language of Opinion" I believe that your finished product will be amazing YET! __This is nothing!____ I can't critise this work - theres nothing to really pick at. You need to write more! You've really interested me with your oppinion about 1815-1848. I'll be back soon! &I can't wait to read this!!! :D

great essay so far! Your strength is clearly explaining and developing ideas in a succinct and digestable manner. Very easy to follow and understand, good use of sophisticated language...I think you need to outline all key points in the introduction though, and not just the categories they fall under.....but yeah...really good essay so far! =] keep it up and it should turn into a really well-structured piece. -Caitlin