Cynthia

__** THE early 1800’s marked Prussia’s time as the second-ranking German power. Prussia was known and expected to follow suit to the autocratic nation of Austria, but, in the short time that would follow, the nation of Prussia would seize a chance to take the upper-hand. Factors contributing to the rise of Prussia and her extended influence were forces for change such as Liberalism, the power of her political body and Economic development. Of these, Prussia’s economic free market, which would later become the Zolleverein, was undeniably the most significant factor that led to Prussia’s largely extended influence over the German states. Liberalism emerged during the 17th and 18th centuries and its failure w as **__a__** **__key force of change__**  that aided Prussia in extending her influence over the German states. Liberals sought **__both__** basic freedoms, political rights and a say in their government, thus**__,__** instantly posing a threat to the power of the absolute monarch and autocrat Frederick William. Over time, the political philosophy would generate uprisings and revolutionary ferment within the middle class and the oppressed peasantry. However, throughout the 1830’s and early 1840’s the liberal movement in Germany was contained. By 1848, the revolutionary unity of purpose once by the people dissolved, subsequently, allowing the King of Prussia to withdraw concessions he had made when the revolution had broke out and restore his absolute rule. King Frederick William had remained hostile to reform and to any dilution of his powers, thus, it can be said that the failure of liberalism not only restored all power to the king but reinforced it. The failure of liberalism cleared the pathway for Prussia’s growing power. During the 1840’s King Frederick William had stabilised his powers and regained control over Prussia while, in contrast, Ferdinand, King of Austria remained feeble minded as ever. The state of political power played a vital role in assisting Prussia to extend her influence over the German states. Prussia’s leaders were consistently open to change whereas Austria showed nothing but belligerent resistance to all forms of cultural and industrial modernisation. These differerences were to, in time, prove to be fundamental to Prussia’s success and increased power. Although the failure of liberalism and the success of Prussia’s leaders showed considerable impact in Prussia’s extended influence over the German states ecomomics was the most significant and imperative contributor. In 1818 Prussia abolished all its internal tariff areas and introduced a single tariff in its place which applied only to goods coming into Prussia from outside instantly spurring economic development. As a result of Prussia’s success, other German states followed suit and soon after, the Prussian customs area was the largest and the most economically important in Germany. Eventually, Prussia’s expanded customs area became the Prussian Customs Union or Zollverein, confirming Prussia’s expanding influence. The formation of the Zollverein was of considerable importance to not only Prussia’s expanding influence but to the political unification of the German states. It meant that the smaller states were linked to and increasingly dependant on, Prussia rather than Austria, and this led to the decline of Austrian influence over the German states, whereby, increasing Prussias. In conclusion, the failure of Liberalism, Politics and Economics during the period 1815-1848 were all in favour to the expansion of Prussia’s influence over the German states. Economics being the most significant and crucial factor of which Prussia used to its advantage, thereby expanding her influence over the surrounding German states.
 * __Explain how Prussia extended her influence over the German states during the period 1815-1848

This was SOOOO good! I liked it. I think your opening sentence is too vague. Prussia was the second ranking what? Second most powerful? The second sentence of ur introduction is poorly written, doesnt make sense. The rest of ur intro is fabulous though. wherever ive highlighted text is where i thought you could rephrase, either because it unnessecary, doesnt make sense, or cud be more formal. VERY GOOOD.  This essay is quite good and is easily understood. It addressess the question well and links back to the question. Perhaps in your opening sentence you could be in more depth we are quick for time but GREAT!

This was pretty good. I believe your opening sentence needs more work. The only reason i'm understanding parts of this essay is because i know the topic. I think that others may get confused when reading this, in other worlds many may not understand the concepts So, i think you should explain a few things more in depth but other than that i believe the essay is amazing. <span style="COLOR: rgb(103,143,91); FONT-FAMILY: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif">  Kudos with: >         <span style="COLOR: rgb(97,129,86); FONT-FAMILY: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif">Good job :D    <span style="COLOR: rgb(97,129,86); FONT-FAMILY: 'Trebuchet MS',Helvetica,sans-serif">!!
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